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= fraza lunga
Sofia Lunar
[27.May.09 22:04]
M-am inecat in prima fraza lunga, lunga, lunga, fara capat. Imparte-o in cateva fraze mai mici, ca fraza de intrare intr-o povestire e descurajanta.

Despre subiect, mi se pare cam neveridic felul in care povesteste copila, sunt naivitati de 7-8 ani, nicidecum de 14-15.

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= fraza lunga	Sofia Lunar [27.May.09 22:04]
M-am inecat in prima fraza lunga, lunga, lunga, fara capat. Imparte-o in cateva fraze mai mici, ca fraza de intrare intr-o povestire e descurajanta. Despre subiect, mi se pare cam neveridic felul in care povesteste copila, sunt naivitati de 7-8 ani, nicidecum de 14-15.