= . | corina dragomir [09.Apr.05 20:02] |
1). *Sun...who*, the correct relative pronoun for objects&natural phenomena is *which* or *that*. 2).spelling mistake: *hidding*-*hiding*. (the eighth verse); the consonant cannot be doubled with such a verb. 3). grammar misuse of the present continuous tense. (subject/predicate (dis)agreement in the last verse: *night are chasing me* - *nights are chasing me* or *night is chasing me*. | |
= for Corina | alina pachitanu [09.Apr.05 20:08] |
thanks, I appreciate it. | |
= more | corina dragomir [09.Apr.05 20:22] |
here: *all the smiles are in my Sun who has hiden in the night* - *smiles...which have hidden* (double *d* - with present perfect simple and passive voice but never with continuous forms.; take care | |
= . | corina dragomir [09.Apr.05 20:25] |
you either make the reference to the Sun or to the smiles. you know what you meant:) | |
= for Corina | alina pachitanu [09.Apr.05 20:40] |
thanks again. I meant the Sun. | |