| = workshop | corina dragomir [04.Jun.05 21:25] |
| the so-called poem shouldn't have been set free on the front page! I would've expected an editor to realize that. it doesn't even surpass the level of poetry which an upper intermediate - english learning student must acquire during hundreds of literature lessons. i'm not doing the jug and smug here but one needs to be realistic and assess the final draft (a particular piece of writing) before submitting it on the web. | |
| = . | Joshua Vasquez Butawan [04.Jun.05 13:55] |
| Simplicity has its own power in which might be a right track for those people who craves for the expressions of others. Easy to say Expressing your self or emotion in a way that other might easily locate your depths. | |
| = Honesty | Edilberto González Trejos [04.Jun.05 16:15] |
| I have found an unusual depth and honesty in this brief text... Simple, may be, but worth the read! Hope to see more posting from you SONGO | |
| = Corina (don't take me wrong) | Joshua Vasquez Butawan [05.Jun.05 08:33] |
| Why don't we consider it, As you said she didin't reached the level of poetry but then her text still worth for reading especially for those people with the same interest as her, Or we should say we should consider her text on her personal not on poetry, Why don't we make an exeption for her idea. | |
| = Corina, why be so cruel? | Cristina Andrei [26.Jul.05 17:42] |
| Corina, you said some pretty cruel things about this poem.There is, you know, a thing called "creative criticism". I believe this site has some other purposes than "chewing up" other people's creations.Anyway, I've read many poems on this site that are far worse than this one. Try making some objective suggestions rather than expressing subjective opinions. Well, it may be quite hard to let subjective issues aside, but anyway, why not try? Why be so cruel? | |
| = give her a chance | anca codrea [17.Aug.05 15:24] |
| I think we have to offer her another chance, don't forget, all of you who might reject this poem from the beginning, that maybe you, at your début, were also a little bit unsecure; so what i propose is:Angelica, you have to let go expressions like 'there is no such thing as this unreality', not because they are not correctly spelled, but because the effect produced is a bit ambiguous.Also, you haver to decide whether you stay with the 2nd person(you) or the 3rd person(he). Good luck! Aldana | |
| = All the best | raj thampi [13.Jun.06 10:20] |
| Joshua we live in an era where people prefer to write a lullaby with the help of multiple Oxford dictionary editions and biased expectations of flattery. They write them expecting the child growing up to age 40, then "enjoying" it. Your poem says something very ture, about love-and there are many unlucky people who never had this blessing from GOD to go through the real feelings of love. Just don't discourage yourself reading them-go ahead with your own way thoughts are words :) | |