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 =  Petru
Corina Gina Papouis
[29.Jul.09 16:20]
I would let go of the word the before the silence (last line!)..
just a suggestion..
Otherwise a sensitive poem...
Regards,
Corina

 =  Corina
Petru Dinc√£
[29.Jul.09 23:10]
Thank you, Corina!
See you around,
Peter

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Veronica Valeanu
[30.Jul.09 20:47]
you have a good perspective of blurring the amplitude as scene
but it would be also interesting to make the perception more accute
that's why i have this sensation that the poem isn't finished
the slide seems to be fit towards an accute point
V.V.




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