| = ... | Veronica Valeanu [15.Aug.09 19:43] |
| [if i had known]{if only i had reached] i think there are too many verbs here- anyway they express moods/states- but here they somehow block this perception of states of mind. (which seem too static and devoid of energy) but i liked the idea of changing 4 seasons into one V.V. | |
| = . | Chelaru Dorin Alexandru [23.Aug.09 21:58] |
| Hmm, perhaps: it's just the way I felt like writing that day:) I'll try and polish it a bit:) | |
| = A moment's inspiration | Veseli Constantin Calin [09.Nov.09 21:11] |
| I like the love, the pain, the pessimistic sharp edge with which you cut away every glance of hope, all of these carefully scattered throughout the text, but you should work on the structure of your poem, it should have at least equal stanzas and a stable meter. Inspiration gives the impulse to write beautiful poems, hard work is what makes them beautiful. "All things blossom and then die". How true. Thank you, respectfully, Colin V | |