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+ derailed...
Corina Gina Papouis
[19.Nov.09 13:49]
I enjoyed your poem, in fact it really got me thinking about that trance and its consequences...I can relate to the waiting, the patience, the let-go feeling, the contorted view of reality...I would have changed the title into the bugs' father or 'Derailed'

a good piece of writing..

 =  Thanks for your thoughs :)
Dan Moldoveanu
[20.Nov.09 08:32]
You know you're hard to satisfy Corina? But again, you raise a good point - the father of bugs isn't really a great title. I do lean towards Derailed over "the bugs' father" - it sounds a bit too much like a mix between "the godfather" and "Bugs" Bunny.

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