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Diana Todea
[27.Nov.09 00:30]
Willy, I found your poem to be beautiful and serene with a touch of ocean breeze. The gentle caress you expressed here is very nicely composed. An enchanting poem and a shiny star. Cheers, Diana!

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Corina Gina Papouis
[27.Nov.09 01:19]
don't mean to spoil the beauty of this poem, but I do have a little nag, Willy.
The scuba diver in me screamed when i read the verse:

'and the bottles of oxygen.'

just purely for the fact that oxygen under pressure kills in a very unpleasant way. Is air you want, in cylinders.

hope my remark does not upset you...there is magic in your poem...and it takes the reader with it...


 =  Diana and Corina-
John Willy Kopperud
[27.Nov.09 09:22]
- thanks a lot both! In the aftermath of writing this I realized that the poem concerns global warming, "deevolution" as a means of retracing and finally nostalgia and romanticism in the sense of longing back to mother's womb, or maybe be reborn. Readers here may interpret it otherwise and I think it's a privilege if they do. Thanks a lot for that yellow star, Diana! Also a big thank
for your advice, Corina! I will indeed change according to what you point out, since I don't see the point of blowing the building in the text to smithereens!
Cheers from Willy

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John Willy Kopperud
[27.Nov.09 09:28]
- Global HEATING, of course!

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