| = long time no smell of pears | Corina Gina Papouis [12.Feb.10 13:43] |
| Your texts have a certain intensity which comes from maybe the way you control your words. There's never an excess of depiction here. Nor is the use of flattering images or loss of track. And I appreciate that... I believe that some improvement is needed in order for the language to flow: I would only like to mention here this particular verse: 'What gave you then' I see it as which I gave you then? oh!..and please change the capital letters of the title into lower-case letters... Many thanks! Corina | |