| = will it? | Corina Gina Papouis [17.Feb.10 00:43] |
| a sensitive poem, Gunsel, unsettling, like an engine taking off on Heathrow..where? wherever your heart decides... cheers, C | |
| = =it definetely will | Gunsel DJEMAL [17.Feb.10 19:37] |
| You know very well where from...it will land on Gatwick though! Thanks for your Comment Corina:) Cheers! | |
| = . | Veronica Valeanu [17.Feb.10 20:17] |
| we are rather interested if the effect is a sensitive one for the reader, not if the author's mood was a sensitive one. and it isn't. | |
| = =Pleasure! | Gunsel DJEMAL [17.Feb.10 23:37] |
| Dear Veronica, It may be difficult for you to come away pleased without any pleasure of my poem/to admire. However, I believe it makes the readers not only overhear these sensitive words...but it also includes the poet in the midst of her work/encountering the same voices/the same questions. The effect is personal and casual/being sensitive to me is: like a parayer lending possibility and desire. Thank you very much for your comment. | |
| = G.D. | Veronica Valeanu [18.Feb.10 17:35] |
| this is only your assumption or intention regarding the exterior effect. the problem is how you get to achieve it in reality. this is the true test. | |
| = V.V | Gunsel DJEMAL [18.Feb.10 19:22] |
| Well Veronica that's your opinion my dear I don't agree with you at all. First of all I write for myself, it's up to the reader/readers If they like it they like it then it belongs to the people. If they don't I couldn't care less. This is not a test it's a poetry site. If you don't like my work don't even bother waisting your time reading it. One more thing for your information your comment doesn't faze me. | |
| = and | Veronica Valeanu [18.Feb.10 19:45] |
| it's not a question of liking/disliking your work.sharing poems is derived from the need of interaction - we may be criticised or praised but what matters is whether it help us to improve, or if we allow it to, in our ideal to create/make sense. it's indifference that should lie heavy. | |
| = VV and GD | Corina Gina Papouis [18.Feb.10 21:02] |
| I enjoyed the poem and as I explained above I sensed emotion...emotion has no rigid carcase so why should the poem revealing it? ...could it embrace another shape? another stanza? a new way of delivering what lies beneath? ..of course...:) sky's the limit...and this is what Gunsel's poem is aiming for... Regards to both! Corina | |
| = readership, authorship & why not, "emotionship" | Veronica Valeanu [18.Feb.10 21:27] |
| like metaphor, emotion as target is difficult to achieve. only invoking it/evoking it is not enough. it's as if we expected/contented ourselves with receiving feedback like this-"i, as reader, understand/sympathise with you". this is not enough (at least for the reader)-why would he be interested in giving a feedback? both participants must be motivated to extend their perceptions and remove the eroded territory(as you were saying, Corina, the sky is the limit). i plead for useful polemics and for a restless search of improvement. | |
| = :) | Corina Gina Papouis [18.Feb.10 22:39] |
| not sure about the word 'must' be motivated, however, 'should' be motivated would rather do it...as writing is a hobby here, rather than a duty to perform (reader/ writer)...and as we all may agree, perfectionism in poetry is not achievable as it rapidly disintegrates from thought into the wonderful realms of words... just a thought..:) | |
| = & | Veronica Valeanu [18.Feb.10 23:37] |
| Corina, don't get me wrong. it's not an imposed duty but an inner urge. of course writing is a hobby here, but everyone should feel encouraged to improve here, otherwise why should there be levels 10, 50, 120, etc? it speaks for itself. this is a way of promotion for an assumed substance. | |
| = Interesting exchange here- | John Willy Kopperud [19.Feb.10 10:44] |
| -and Valeria has a point when she insists upon the significance of the reader's impression rather than the author's own feelings. Nevertheless the poem is written "con amore" and that must be taken into account. I did feel a bit of mountain air to my face there! Cheers from Willy | |
| = better to show than to tell | ion a [24.Feb.10 17:49] |
| like every other art, poetry has a craft aspect, a technique if you will, that has to be learned. most of the time, aspiring poets are simply using too many words. haiku or haiku-like exercises might be useful, for instance rainbow on your wings centuries on my mind - rhythms on the purple horizon the poem is not necessarily "better" this way, but simply more enticing, letting the reader to pick her own emotions rather than "telling" her how to feel good luck! | |
| = fashion? maybe. | Motoc Lavinia [24.Feb.10 21:29] |
| I really enjoyed the weight of ' centuries on my mind' and the question that stays with the reader: ' is the sky the dwelling of the eagles'? What I less liked is the the dreamy flavour the ' someday...' bit, I do believe that the poem deserves a better form to be clothed in. | |