| = hi there! | Corina Gina Papouis [02.Mar.10 17:54] |
| welcome to Agonia! I have difficulties processing this text, it could be the way it is translated. example: 'Do not expect as happiness you to jump...'(..?..) and 'ashes of the old silent..'(did you mean silence?) please review! Regards, Corina | |
| = . | Corina Gina Papouis [06.Mar.10 12:09] |
| typos!...and grammar! | |
| = hello! | Claudiu GURGUTA [09.Mar.10 02:22] |
| good evening try and correct some of the following: jump in your arms / try and write "jumps in your arms" racks af shop / try and write "racks of a coffee shop" like a cigrette / try something "like a cigarette" the ashes of old silences / my suggestion is "ashes of old silences" best wishes, Claudiu | |
| = . | Veronica Valeanu [16.Mar.10 14:59] |
| or [do not expect happiness to jump} | |