| = KKS | Veronica Valeanu [17.May.10 19:09] |
| here you are, anatomizing slices of the being like a surgeon! there's also a saturnian approach, deeply embedded i like very much the fact that the text is built on the verge of making the reader millimetrically mistaking the self-sufficiency for deescalating self-sufficiency smth that is too explicit: [impuissant ego] and [interior being]. at the same time you might be careful of not abusing the adjective. you could also skip some '"I"s here and there. I like that [orotund shadow]. regards, VV | |
| = Regards | Kuldeep Kumar Srivastava [18.May.10 10:56] |
| Thanks V V. I hold your comments in high esteem. These improve me. Warm Regards KK | |
| = self-perception | Dely Cristian Marian [19.May.10 14:31] |
| i like this poetry. seems that love encounters itself in many corners, visible or not. alienates wrathfulness. i saw a little of myself too there, and it brought me inmost rest. with consideration, a friend | |
| = thanks | Kuldeep Kumar Srivastava [19.May.10 19:07] |
| Marian, thanks for reading my poem and commenting. Pl be regular. | |