| = . | Veronica Valeanu [18.May.10 12:31] |
| [impermanent beauty]seems not such a fortunate choice of words [incomprehensible red] - creates confusion and a breach in the coherence of the text {4 dead horses on the railroad}- adds more confusion- why that number, why dead horses there seems to be no conflict, everything is too linear maybe you could find another ending as well | |