| = a | Veronica Valeanu [03.Jan.11 20:01] |
| in the 2nd part i think there are way too many [it's, its] the form ['cause] seems rather inappropriate here, you could get rid of it and do smth with [the goodness of mine heart] | |
| = Thank you | Andrada Ianosi [03.Jan.11 22:30] |
| Thank you a lot for the suggestions. As you can see I've replaced the "it's/its" with something else, something that works better, although I've sort of changed what I meant to say in the first place. I also got rid of the inappropriate "'cause". On the other hand, I've decided to keep "the goodness of mine heart", I don't really see any problem with it. Could you explain what exactly bothers you about it? Best wishes , A | |
| = and | Veronica Valeanu [04.Jan.11 14:57] |
| i suggest [that it's for you i'm killing the goodness in mine heart] instead of [That’s it’s for you I’m killing the goodness of mine heart] - it seemed too emphasized and correct [thine]instead of [ tyhne ] | |
| = Done | Andrada Ianosi [04.Jan.11 16:51] |
| Thank you. Once again. Now it sounds much better. | |