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Corina Gina Papouis
[28.Feb.11 19:16]
Quite simplistic and lacking the 'mojo' of poems that usually grasp the reader. The text could do with a severe polish and better imagery.
the verse: 'today I feel devastated' actually killed it for me but the repetition of 'iceberg' did not bring anything back (I'm talking about re-enforcing the message!).
However, having said that, is your first poem posted here. Better luck next time.:)

cheers,
Corina

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= .	Corina Gina Papouis [28.Feb.11 19:16]
Quite simplistic and lacking the 'mojo' of poems that usually grasp the reader. The text could do with a severe polish and better imagery. the verse: 'today I feel devastated' actually killed it for me but the repetition of 'iceberg' did not bring anything back (I'm talking about re-enforcing the message!). However, having said that, is your first poem posted here. Better luck next time.:) cheers, Corina