| = raptured morning | Dana Muºat [09.Nov.05 15:19] |
| Romulus, first, i would like to tell you that you don't have to write the title and your name before writting the text, because they will appear on their sectin. About ypur poetry..i think i like the ideea. The painfull images captured me: "their toy to children" "Or toilet paper, diapers, mummies To wipe my feelings dry" and my favourite "Oh, raptured morning, evening glow Of what my eyes are drinking You barless prison, stringless bow Beheaded death with fingers itching."-this could be a poem alone, without the rest of the text. One think i noticed: "they bite my life and chew it"-is not very original ideea, we all know that many poets used this. Thank you. | |
| = Raptured...! | Romulus Campan [09.Nov.05 15:21] |
| Oh, what a joy to read you thoughts! Thank you so much for the time you spent reading my poem and writing you heart. First of all, thank you for your kind help, re layout! Much needed and apreciated. I'll do as you suggested from now on. Further, I'm just "raptured"! Your words are such un encouragement, especially as you are the first to write some real comments about any of my poems, as I'm very new here. I had sort of same thought re "bit and chew" passage, so I'll work on it. It's a privillege to have read you thoughts. Be allways exceedingly welcome:-) | |