| = my opinion! | Marius Surleac [22.Oct.08 19:25] |
| Losing ourselves in the sea of oblivion under the influence of nymph’s/mermaid’s songs! Though I have to point that I don’t understand the sense of “of death light”, maybe you wanted to say “death’s light”. Also, can you explain me “siren nebulas” – is there a nebula that has the name Siren, or you wanted to say “siren’s nebulas”. I like the idea here and my opinion is that the last two stanzas are very well shaped but the first two stanzas can be improved. Best wishes, Marius | |