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= powerful and deeply
Marius Surleac
[15.Jun.08 12:01]
The imagery is well used; this is more than a poem, is a deep thought, a deep meditation - in the empty world, "you" is to be found. But raven signifies something else, the eyes of a raven mean "memory" (as in the Hugin and Munin - Odin's ravens) - maybe here is a reverse memory deeply sank.
Though I have to make few observations: I think that there is “raven look alone” instead of “looks” and “an empty” instead of “a empty”.

Sincerely,
Marius

= intuitive mr surleac.
Christopher Thripp
[15.Jun.08 22:13]
marius your absolutely correct... either we think the same or you almost definately know where i am coming from ........thank you marius.
= Concise and well-shaped, Chris!
John Willy Kopperud
[16.Jun.08 10:12]
Just be sure that you change the A to AN in the third line.
AN is what you put before a pronounced wovel sound.
Cheers from Willy
= thanks
Christopher Thripp
[17.Jun.08 08:25]
a an it is thanks willy.

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= powerful and deeply	Marius Surleac [15.Jun.08 12:01]
The imagery is well used; this is more than a poem, is a deep thought, a deep meditation - in the empty world, "you" is to be found. But raven signifies something else, the eyes of a raven mean "memory" (as in the Hugin and Munin - Odin's ravens) - maybe here is a reverse memory deeply sank. Though I have to make few observations: I think that there is “raven look alone” instead of “looks” and “an empty” instead of “a empty”. Sincerely, Marius

= intuitive mr surleac.	Christopher Thripp [15.Jun.08 22:13]
marius your absolutely correct... either we think the same or you almost definately know where i am coming from ........thank you marius.

= Concise and well-shaped, Chris!	John Willy Kopperud [16.Jun.08 10:12]
Just be sure that you change the A to AN in the third line. AN is what you put before a pronounced wovel sound. Cheers from Willy

= thanks	Christopher Thripp [17.Jun.08 08:25]
a an it is thanks willy.