| = good corina. | Christopher Thripp [26.Jul.08 23:53] |
| floating the words out ... the "smell of jasmine" great images nice work | |
| = nice | Daniela Voicu [27.Jul.08 11:05] |
| yes , very nice ... | |
| = to chris | Corina Gina Papouis [27.Jul.08 11:04] |
| hi chris, good to see you again. glad you like the smell of jasmine..:) cheers, Corina | |
| + true serendipity - well done | Marius Surleac [27.Jul.08 11:35] |
| Well, this is a very good poem! I saw within the words a burning desire, the desire for the moment of life. The poem goes swiftly and sharp through the eyes of the audience. Your body's engine works 200 %, the adrenaline blows away the normal behaviour and brings you to the border between reality and imagination. Though, I've seen also some aggressive passages within the poem: "whispers of dread" / "can't breath, adrenaline gallop" / "synapses collapse" / "excruciating pain". But the most expressive verse from the whole poem I found it to be "nails shrieking walls" - reflects the idea of despair. Well done! Best wishes, Marius | |
| = to Marius.. | Corina Gina Papouis [27.Jul.08 16:06] |
| Marius, Serendipity is about taking a trip, looking for something, but fortunate enough to find something better. Lucky girl, it looks like she found herself!:)..and yes, it required pain, an almost out-of-body experience scattered with plenty of adrenaline. what a ride! Marius, thank you for the star and for your in depth analyses. Regards, Corina | |
| = daniela | Corina Gina Papouis [28.Jul.08 11:21] |
| thanks for your comment.. | |