| = interesting | Diana Todea [02.Jan.09 21:56] |
| I liked some images from your poem. However I find it a little bit too abstract for my taste, although this is not a crime. "oblivions"="oblivion" (forgetfulness), it doesn't have a plural, because is strange to call forgetfulness-es, or unconsciousness-es. But in the end your poem is like nature and hits the breeze of autumn. Cheers, Diana. | |
| = thank you Diana! | Marius Surleac [02.Jan.09 22:06] |
| Diana, I think you're right about the plural form even if I have found it written that way in many places - I used initially the singular form but I wasn't completely sure, so I wanted to see if anyone else approves this or not. In Romanian it is allowed. Glad you liked it! Thank you! Cheers, Marius | |
| = sequel... | Marius Surleac [02.Jan.09 22:30] |
| I thought about what you said and decided to remain like that at the plural form - form that is used for a long time. Best wishes, Marius | |
| = That dusty accordion will keep throbbin... | John Willy Kopperud [03.Jan.09 00:15] |
| ...in this parade of images. Hit me with that rhythmstick! Cheers from Willy | |
| = a | Corina Gina Papouis [03.Jan.09 00:57] |
| text that gives the reader wings!:) i would have lost some 'the's' for a lighter feel: 'I run over seas and dive into skylines burnt by the fires of hell' 'all we feel for each other is relative – vibrations, tears, sighs, embraces' *the music is out of this world! Loved it! Cheers, Corina | |
| = thank you Willy! | Marius Surleac [03.Jan.09 11:06] |
| Willy, honourably I thank you for your words and for the twinkle. I am glad you liked it and this rhythm stays inside of everybody’s heart. Best regards, Marius | |
| = thank you Corina! | Marius Surleac [03.Jan.09 11:20] |
| Corina, glad you liked it and you're right about that "the's" - it could have been lighter if I had used only one "the" at the begging of each line (meaning that only the first noun has greater significance than others). But I have used it for each noun because I wanted to point the value of each one of them. That's why those two lines appear as they are in the poem. Thank you very much Corina! P.S. I wrote this poem when listening this song of Yann Tiersen! Best wishes, Marius | |
| = I liked this! | Lynn West [07.Jan.09 09:05] |
| I really enjoyed this one - I liked it - I felt it. | |
| = thank you Lynn! | Marius Surleac [07.Jan.09 10:50] |
| Lynn, I am glad you liked it and felt it. Thank you! Cheers, Marius | |
| = my opinion | Laurenţiu Ion [08.Jan.09 12:22] |
| is here a poem based on the method of abstracting, that method which makes the reader tremble, more than a moment to oneself, an interact of our individual places. of course, here's not just the auhor's places, here's our daily senses, but not most of them. so, I read it and I liked it. well done! best regards, | |
| = correction | Laurenţiu Ion [08.Jan.09 12:23] |
| author :) | |