| = rhymes... | Romulus Campan Maramuresanu [31.May.07 19:32] |
| Welcome Alex, Although your poem has interesting rhymes and ideas, you should work on it a bit more, as it's still pretty "childish", like I’m bleeding poison from my veins On my window it now rains I now dream about your smile The one I haven’t seen for a while These are "first level" English language rhymes, keep writing, depth should come... Success. | |