| = suppose | stancu andra [19.Nov.03 02:17] |
| Shilouettes of time Keys of an old, broken piano Dusty, dirty and still proud Of the sound they held within allow me to take a wild guess: the memory af thinges that once have been and will never be again is haunting your sleepless nights | |
| = Anathema - Sleepless | Florian Ardelean [19.Nov.03 23:47] |
| Doesn't the past haunt us all? | |
| = Corrections (A LOT !!) | kurt cnejevici [20.Nov.03 00:38] |
| Florin, I would suggest you check your texts for mistakes first instead of posting so many at one time: For instance, just in this text you have no less than 5 places (including the TITLE) where you misspelled words: it is SILHOUETTES not Shilouettes ! Duh ! Also: it is millennia not millenia Scarcely not Scarcley rot not rott I’m sure everybody appreciates your enthusiasm but I mean, come on ! | |
| = I'm sorry | Florian Ardelean [20.Nov.03 14:05] |
| Tahnks, kurt. I'll be more careful in the future. This is a very old poem, I didn't eve check it before I posted... my mistake. It won't happen again. | |
| = follow-up corrections | kurt cnejevici [20.Nov.03 22:10] |
| good, I see you fixed it. Keep in mind that the way you present your poem is as important as the poem itself. Think it as a way of presenting an emotion. If it's in the right form, sounds real, if not, it's like a lunch menu. By the way, in your poem "Thoughts of sanity" you also have some mistakes: it is blissful not blisful and extolled not extoled. | |
| = Lunch menu | Florian Ardelean [20.Nov.03 23:23] |
| "Lunch menu"... hey, I guess that would make me the master chef! Anyone hungry? Hahaha!! | |