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corina dragomir
[08.Apr.05 20:28]
here's a different perspective. I tailored a warm coat out of your short&nice seasonal poem. (2 v/.)

the soul gone with the leaves
like hope rising another spring

regarding your attempt to catch a glimpse of mind-body-nature with all its shapes, transitions, reactions, transformations etc., I think the word "autumn" should be left out or replaced with another word in order to create an indirect calling forth/stimulation of the reader's imagination. despite the haiku atmosphere, it expresses a similar setting and emotional significance as in a taiku or a tanka form. dara, is this a tanka or...some other japanese verse form?

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= .	corina dragomir [08.Apr.05 20:28]
here's a different perspective. I tailored a warm coat out of your short&nice seasonal poem. (2 v/.) the soul gone with the leaves like hope rising another spring regarding your attempt to catch a glimpse of mind-body-nature with all its shapes, transitions, reactions, transformations etc., I think the word "autumn" should be left out or replaced with another word in order to create an indirect calling forth/stimulation of the reader's imagination. despite the haiku atmosphere, it expresses a similar setting and emotional significance as in a taiku or a tanka form. dara, is this a tanka or...some other japanese verse form?