| = How to measure love | Virginia Popescu [05.Nov.08 12:29] |
| Dear Andrew, I am glad you like writing English poetry. I also wrote some poems but I'm not so strong in English. My first language is French, the second Romanian and English is the third. I noticed some mistakes in your poem and I hope you won't be angry on me if I tell you about them: to tell hiver = winter? women is the plural of woman; which is usually used for things; here it's correct; I'm not the woman who; just kneaded my parfume / maybe knealt? didn't look like anythink else = you didn't look like anything else, but I'm not sure if this construction is correct; a liter of butterflies that sounds to me very very strange; in the same timp / maybe in the same time but this doesn't match with not today, not tomorrow, in my opinion; could have cost a lot if I would have hurry.../ after if conditional you have to use past tense; I will be rare? I don't understand what you wanted to say; You are a very talented young man but I advise you to write shorter poems for the beginning. I have already read some of your poems in Romanian and I liked them much. Good luck! | |