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Stoica Dan
[06.Oct.20 18:03]
"ochii tai canta prin nalucirile colorate
ale mirosului de toamna"

In asta as transforma primele 4 versuri.

Cu restul poemului as face ceva asemanator acesta avand nevoie, dupa parerea mea, de o armonizarea a discursului, ultimul fiind atat de dulce, incat ameninta cititorii cu diabetul zaharat.




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