| = Beyond the rhyme | Romulus Câmpan Maramureșanu [15.Jun.24 15:06] |
| Ionel, your text speaks from the heart. I would recommend nevertheless, exploring more the depths which elevatate a text into the realms of poetry, beyond the rhyme which you have concentrated on. rcm | |
| = thank you | Ionel Movila [18.Jun.24 20:40] |
| yes that is true, i did try to concentrate on the rhyme, but on the feelings to, it might not be the best work out there, but English it is not my native language, so forgive me, and thank you | |
| = nothing to forgive Ionel | Romulus Câmpan Maramureșanu [18.Jun.24 20:45] |
| Ionel, there's absolutely nothing to forgive. You are writing from the heart, you have obvious talent, what you need is reading more English poetry and get accustomed with writing English poetry, which is only a matter of development. I am following you with much interest, and am here to support your progress. rcm | |
| = thank you | Ionel Movila [31.Jul.24 16:38] |
| thank you so much i appreciate that | |
| + The fine line between desperation and hope | Romulus Câmpan Maramureșanu [31.Jul.24 16:47] |
| Finding the nigh impossible to grasp balance between structure and the waves of a poet's heart, is most often the hardest task before writing a poem. What should never be done, is silencing the heart while enforcing structure; because as I said, it's often impossible. Ionel's poem comes from a place of darkness which does however, see the light of hope. Yet the choice in this poem, has been to remain hidden in the shadows until the fine line between desperation and the certainty of something maybe better, draws closer. The poem is worth reading, pondering on its messages. rcm | |