| = ! | Corina Gina Papouis [21.Aug.09 13:07] |
| I think your poem is a good attempt to describe love and passion, however, the words and images used here do not trigger those feelings at all, they fail to deliver the message. I find them too descriptive, overused in so many other writings. Try a different angle, a different approach, be bold! Better luck next time. Best wishes! Corina | |