| = . | Veronica Valeanu [23.Mar.10 13:53] |
| still needing consistent improvements to become a poem. | |
| = . | Claudiu GURGUTA [05.Apr.10 18:02] |
| you need more work on the second stanza and the last one doesn't have your previous fluency found in most of your poems, in addition to that, repeating one to many times the "will" troubles me from the readers perspective. please try and revise when you find the right time. | |