| = welcome new member | Veronica Valeanu [17.Aug.10 18:22] |
| I found this text to be very revealing for your resources. It even seems a sort of creed. for all the paths that writing can lead you to. (if writing were your water!) ps. - please read the rules of the site and remember not to post more than 2 texts per day all the best, VV | |
| = Ana Maria | Luminita Suse [22.Aug.10 17:01] |
| This poem shows clearly that you have what it takes to write well crafted, short, essential poetry. Well done! One detail does not seem quite right: the usage of the word 'aquaria' (a tank or pool or bowl filled with water for keeping live fish and underwater animals) as you seem to be depicting rather 'dry' scenes, as seen in a museum diorama/panorama. Technically speaking, anything may be possible in poetry/art, but smoking and echoes in water?... Also, watch out for using too many gerunds - in the first two stanzas. | |