| = * | Dely Cristian Marian [10.Feb.13 13:57] |
| Dear Cristina, I have to say that I enjoy the touch of your poetry. It's like a glowing snowdrop over a land of dreams, a kind of harmony 'cos the swiz feels like the nature is cheating back. Cheers, dcm | |
| = touching | Corina Gina Papouis [11.Feb.13 14:34] |
| I must say it is a poem that appeals to the inner self of the reader and lets him/ her deal with it. A moving poem where there is a balanced harmony between love and regret or perhaps guilt, past and willing to move on. the say: 'No sword cuts off a bowed head' is challenged here in a beautiful way. I would suggest replacing bent with bowed. Regards! | |
| = .. | Corina Gina Papouis [11.Feb.13 15:06] |
| in the first stanza: piles of bitter words flowing by the corners of his mouth like downpour in the trough ..I hear it better this way. What say you? | |
| = a scene | Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu [13.Feb.13 08:33] |
| Thanks Dely ! I'm glad you liked it. Corina, thanks for your suggestion. I will change only the third line in the first stanza. But I prefer bent instead of bowed, I found this expression and I think it is correct. This poem was inspired by a real scene in my life. Sometimes the scenery speaks about the inner self,exactly like you say. | |