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Corina Gina Papouis
[02.Jan.14 13:29]
Try and reshape some of the verses, maybe get rid of some of the unnecessary words and it will hopefully look and read better.

Polish spelling as well please!
Example:
and my rain heated, in steams of longing melt
and what fierce longing, Love
what stupid longing
(this repetition is rather heavy and unnecessary)

Kind regards!

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= suggestion	Corina Gina Papouis [02.Jan.14 13:29]
Try and reshape some of the verses, maybe get rid of some of the unnecessary words and it will hopefully look and read better. Polish spelling as well please! Example: and my rain heated, in steams of longing melt and what fierce longing, Love what stupid longing (this repetition is rather heavy and unnecessary) Kind regards!